Dr Faustus sent this in for the first paragraph’s closing punctuation and the erroneous conjunction in the second, demonstrating carelessness and a failure to proofread before posting. Also notable is the opening paragraph’s structure:
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| Link: Cambridge News, ‘Study finds Labour councillors agree with Jeremy Corbyn […]’ |
Primary and secondary clauses related in this way must have the same subject; however, the subject of the opening, dependent clause here is ‘the clear favourite’ (Corbyn), but the main clause’s subject is ‘the study’. This creates a disjunction between the two syntactical units, and undermines both grammatical and logical sense in literally asserting that the study is the favourite Labour candidate. The details provided, being independent, should be given in separate sentences.
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